Peer Review 3 JOE MILLER

Jeremy Creger

Review for Joe Miller

Brandon Bender

11/27/2012

Peer Review

I like the way this paper is introduced. However, in the beginning of the paper, the information Swales gave on disccourse communities should all be within quotation marks. "is defined in six points: a broad agreed set of goals, ways of intercommunication, ways of provide feedback and information, is comprised one or more genres, has specific language, and is comprised of new members and "experts" (471-473). As far as the rest of the introduction, I enjoy how Swales quotes are given to us, then told that they need to be updated based on the information you have gathered. This drew me in as a reader to see how Swales is not completely accurate.

I agree with the information provided about Gee and Swales definition about discourse communities and mushfaking. It is an intresting topic to think about when you have someone with "dual expertise". However, I would pick a different way to present your questions and research. The headings above the articles also need attention. In my opinion, that makes your writing a little bit too choppy and interrupts the flow.

The concept of the two groups within the one discourse is challenging for me. Anyone may attend these event, for any reason at all. The AMC to me is a multiple expertise group. Because of the groups dedication to music as listeners and musicians, this creates one solid group who take part in appreciating and creating the tunes.

Being able to define passive and active members with in a discourse makes us able to understand the goals of that discourse better. I completely agree, and the emphisis is well needed. Because we are not used to multiple expert discourses, the differences between the members helps us understand how they also work as one with in the groups. This paper is helpful when exploring a new definition of discourse communities.

Bell Hooks

QDJ
1. Hooks means that she wanted to create a different story for herself.  She wanted to live and remember differently through her writing, birthing a new identity.

2. Act of remembering is not always a representation of the truth. With this definition, I realize that writing has no limits, and can create a false sense of understanding or information to the reader. This does not have to be a bad thing, in Hook's writing, she is attempting to leave behind her stuggle of a childhood in order to create a new identity.

3. Hooks uses an image of pain and dispair to frame her writing.  I feel she did this in order to explain her reasoning of creating a bio-mythology.  Not to make the reader feel bad, but to understand her reason for the text.

AEI
1. I do not think her using the phrase "kill her former self" does not at all effect the reliability of her article.  If anything, it is her life, and we as readers are lucky enough to be able to put ourselves into the pain she had, and the obsticles she overcame with her writing.  My view is not complicated. Instead, I clearly understand and can see where she is coming from while she wrote her autobiography. It makes the mood and voice of the article that much more detailed.

Sticky Embrace Of Beauty

This advertisement is reckless. From the straws, to the word "junkie", and lets not forget the look of reget and well, quite frankly it looks like nothing is going on in her head.  This messege is not okay for society's standards, but more importantly to women in general.

QDJ

1. I agree with Wysocki. With contrast, repetition, alignment and proximity make the reader key in on cetain parts of an image. It is acceptable to view the ad based on those standards, although the argument for nudity and exploiting women.

2. Having the image spoon fed to you via text is very helpful. It helps me as a writer and a reader to understand why we become attached or focused on key points in an image, reguardless of the sexuality or explicit nature of the image.

3. I find the book very appealing, and no, not because of the suggestive nature of the photograph. But rather the concept on how pictures are made appealing for all audiences.  A women may not want to see suggestive pictures of another women, or a man viewing another male.  But after reading this article, the reason I feel the Kinsly Institute created this book in a sort of ironic way in order to give the audience an example of this detailed imagery based on societies typical exploitation.

AEI
1. Artwork can be interpreted in different ways in different situations. Many times artwork is related to personal feelings or passions. I have had different felings on a piece of art.  That is okay, no one has the same exact mind, or passion.

2. Beauty is in the eye of the beholder. I believe there is a person for everyone out there. People look for different qualities in people  A match in these qualities can create a spark in a person. But we do construct beauty as a society. There are many social factors that effect decisions. Such as models, advertisements, televesion, and movies all help shape what society thinks is beautiful or appealing.

3. I agree on Wysocki's ideas on how to view an image. All suggestiveness aside, the contrast, repitition, alignment and proximity all can be considered subconcious ways we view an image. After our subconcious studying of an image, we then develop feelings and opinions of tha image.

MM
Wysocki's statement is very much in relation to her article. It pushes us as an audience to learn the social and temporal expectations of visual composition. This can be said for all forms of art. There are tricks an artist can use visually to shape a way a viewer sees an image, similar to how a writer can make a reader perceive the text.

Heilker and Yergeau

I understand Autism as a rhetoric because it is involve with many different forms of communication. After watching the video on autism in class, it is cool to see that Autistic people can interact with normal language, but then they take it deeper to "interacting with the world constantly".  People with autism tend to keep their types of communication to themself.  As writers, a lot of the time we do the same thing. We tend to close off some things, and go more deeply into others. Understanding Autism creates a parallel with normal rhetoric in this case. And a lot of the time I enjoy going in depth into specific pieces in my writing, because those pieces are closer to the heart and more dear to me. Very similar to the way Autism works.

Jim Henson

Throughout Jim Henson's movie, I couldnt help but notice the vast difference in societal points of view. Sexual assult was the topic that hit home for me the most, because I unfortunatly have close friends who have survived an ordeal. Back then, society was constantly exploiting women and blaming them for any woe they may have encountered.  Society took all power from women and it was placed in the men's hands. So if a women was raped, it was her fault.  But from a mediator position, it is not fair to put blame on a victim already strpped of importance and power.  Today, similar discrimination takes place, however now sexual assult is seen as negative and illegal in societies eyes.  This is the way it should have always been.  This helps protect women but also give them the power to stand up and voice what else is wrong. 

Perseus, being the son of Zues, was successful with the slaying of Medusa. Although he is a son of a God, he had to learn and overcome adversity. Myths are useful, for lessons and arithmitic. However, people will soak in these lessons different ways, based on their own life experiences. With this in mind, I think it is fair to say Myths cannot be considered a legitimate construct.

Alexander

Male
- Masculinity
- Less emotion
- Strong
- Higher management positions
- Straight forward

Female
- Feminine
- Emotional/more passionate
- Underdog status in the career field
- Go behind back, talk around.

 Masculinity and Feminine qualities do tend to sway our writing. But I do not believe it needs to. Transgender writing take the qualities from men and women, combining for a more diverse and open form of writing.  If males and females alike should be tested for their writing techniques and possibly be required to take thier opposite course.  This way we are more open to different styles and are possibly able to adapt, becoming more experienced writers.

Delpit and Smitherman

Analyizing Gee's article a second time opens up my eyes a little bit more to the struggles of writing.  Gee comments on Primary and Secondary discourses, Pimary taking place at home, and secondary with your social life.  Delpit explains how these discourses can create a "literacy gap" between races, cultures, and genders. So we must adhere to this and create a way so these people do not have to overcome obsticles to the aquisition of higher-level writing. 

I understand the frustration behind african americans. I understand that hundereds of years of enslavement and lack of education help mold the "black english".  And after all that time with developing their own slang and form of english, society will not accept this academically.  Which I do agree with in a way.  Because we are able to say as a majority that this is not acceptable, doesn't make it right. Approaching from a different angle perhaps in order to ensue that all students are able to build off of their own induvidual abilities, and progress be graded.  Not a grade based on a standardized understanding.